I'm in the middle of watching it now...
DoveMagic, my main issue with your vid is that more than half of it takes place either entirely off camera or half off camera, making it very difficult to watch, not to mention annoying and suspicious, though your use of the gaff was good.
shinichikudo992000, for one your video is far over the time limit. However, consider this. I've just watched the first 7 seconds of your video, and you say this:
"Ok, let's start easy right here, ok?"
"Let's start with something... Easy."
And then I've just watched a bit more, and you've said:
"So... I'm gonna stop at a random card. Ok?"
Then you show us the card and name it, twice...
"Ok, I'm gonna take this card, because... Now... Because... My uhh initials are there."
Honestly, the patter is awful, we can see that you're stopping at a random card, and the vast majority of us seem to be literate, so it stands to reason that we can understand what's going on. With the last line, by saying "this card" instead of "your card" we can tell you know that it's not your card... Also, some of the technical moves need more fluidity, the lifts for example were a little slow. The magic itself isn't bad by any means, and I liked your gaff choice, but try and be more confident. I only watched up to the opening phase of the second trick, by the way.