Nice one Chris, it's looking good!
I'd only recommend to work on the "flare" timing, you seem to bring your right hand clipped packet out before it should be moved. Also, I have a feeling that the Sybilism phase should have more style adapted to it; it seems a few others agree ranging from the comments on the video. Perhaps try not to over-exaggerate/force the 'stutters' in the Sybil, and just let it naturally flow, like you've been doing it all your life.
Just a few personal points I thought needed to be made. Nevertheless, good try man.
Best,
Jordan