Like with your other videos, you still really want to be Daniel Madison, and you're probably going to hear the same comments you got last time. No doubt here you got inspiration from Dan's Wrath trailer?
I really couldn't enjoy this because I know it wasn't you - it was your bad imitation of someone else's creativity. The bad part is, if you had your own style and concept of this, it might be a neat little video! But it's choked in lack of imagination and idol worship.
This doesn't work because you're copying and stealing someone else's ideas. It doesn't provoke interest in your or what you do. It makes people think, "Wow, this guy's just trying to rip off Daniel Madison."
Make a new video and make it original. No Daniel Madison black and white, no Daniel Madison attire, no Daniel Madison cuts and edits, no Daniel Madison moves, no Daniel Madison anything - because you're not Daniel Madison! Be unique for your own vision and creativity. Don't be some magician's cover band.