Good you took my advice... Now I know I didn't make that video for nothing...
Ok, some things I didn't like...
1. You talked about the deck, called them Bee Stingers, and then later you called them Houdini's deck. Like Chris said make the Houdini thing a joke, and stop bragging about your deck.
2. You took almost 30 seconds just to start the trick. Make it simple and get to the point.
3. Learn to shuffle. Don't just randomly cut. I know people say youtube isn't a good source, but I wouldn't tell you to buy a dvd on how to shuffle a deck. You just did a bunch of swing cuts at the beginning. You don't need that many. Just do a couple and a riffle shuffle. Thats all.
4. You looked kind of uncomfortable. You kept flipping the deck over and other stuff and kept repeating yourself.
5. Worst thing, and a lot of beginners do this, you said, I'm not holding any breaks. I know you made this probably for magicians, but still. Don't say "I don't have any breaks." Spectators won't even think of that. I know I'm just repeating what Chris said, but this is important.
Overall, I'm happy that you improved and listened to my video. But stop sticking on this trick. It isn't really one that's absolutely outstanding.
Now I can't give you more advice, gotta do hw... lol..
Rupayan