My College Application Essay

Sep 1, 2007
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Proofread it again. Also, try to get away from conventions such as "...was a life changing experience..." or "...so this one time at band camp..." etc. Admissions staff appreciate subtlety and originality. Try to illustrate better how "My experience with magic has helped me throughout my life."
 
Sep 26, 2007
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Commas are your friend, too many periods = painful to read. Learn how to make compound sentences and try your best to not sound repetitive. By this, I do not mean try not to say the same thing over and over again, but rather, try not to make every sentence "sound" the same. To be honest, I got really bored half-way through and thought to myself, I have read thousands of essays like this before.

By the way, I am an English teacher and a freelance writer, and the greatest advice I can give you is: having your essay proofread once is not smart, it is common sense. Having your essay proofread twice is a good idea, but only a bit better than common sense. Having your essay proofread three times is getting closer to being smart... you get the idea.
 
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