ok thanks so my moves are better but the patter sucked? o well i like it!
Honestly, I thought the patter was better than every single one of the "moves" you used. I am not being rude. I am being honest. The worst thing a magician can do to another magic is tell them things looked good when they don't. A person will never learn to better themselves if they are surrounded by "yes-men".
Your double lift still needs work. Lots of work. If it was me, I would take a week away from all magic and really study and practice hard on your double lift.
Next you really do not want to get a break for the double using your left thumb the way you do in the video. I know you are trying to hide things for the camera, but you will not be performing for a camera. You will be performing for people standing in front of you not over the top of the deck the way this video was shot.
You still over handle the deck. You don't have to do all the riffles and squaring up that you do. It's not just the deck though. You even over handle single cards. In your video you showed the queen of spades and said it wasn't the spectators card then attempted to do a pirouette flourish. (BTW if you are going to learn it, learn it from the
>right place<) Lee Asher told me once, about one of my original sleights, that the more you touch the deck the more people are going to think you are "doing something" whether you are or not.
On to the actual effect itself :
Card is chosen then you show the bottom and the top card of the deck (six of diamonds and ace of hearts) for absolutely no reason. Then with the deck face down you peel off the bottom card (6 of D) and put it face up on top of a face down deck for absolutely no reason. Then you take that card back and put it on the bottom of the deck for absolutely no reason. Back to the two cards (6 of D and A of H) from the top and bottom of the deck. They have nothing to do with the end of the effect. So why do you bring so much attention to them. Then you reveal the 3 of clubs reversed in the deck.
I really am not trying to sound rude about this. The biggest word of advice I can give you is to take your copy of Royal Road and open it to the Overhand Shuffle Chapter at the beginning of the book and start from there. You do not need to buy a single book or DVD that you have on your "list". If you do own Royal Road then that is enough to last you a while.
Owning too much magic in your first year will do nothing but overload you. Take your time, you are young. You have forever to get good at magic. Royal Road has good effects in it. In the first chapter of Royal Road is the trick "Topsy-Turvy Cards". It will serve you well. Learn the Overhand Shuffle and dominate with this effect. You do not have to do the "cool magic" to do good magic. Just because you don't see videos for sale on T11 and E about effects in Royal Road doesn't mean they can't hit hard and be great effects.
AND FOR GOD'S SAKE, QUIT LEARNING MAGIC OFF OF YOUTUBE!