It's a neat idea, my only question is why?
You seal cards in an envelope, stab it with a pencil, tear the envelope half open and then turn the pencil - a card is raised and then it changes.
I know it's still just an idea, but do you have any presentation ideas or is it just something you're playing with, because I would think a rising card that isn't being touched by a pencil would have a magical impact as opposed to a 'oh, he just turned the pencil...and it showed my card.'
The text cuts were not necessary, I have eyes and know what a pencil and an envelope look like - no need to spell it out for me. It felt as though you were being condescending, which is something I hate about magicians in general when their scripts include telling me what everything is... 'I have a deck of cards' 'Really...I didn't notice'
Just a few thoughts I had while watching. Again, looks neat - but not impossible, and magic isn't improbable, it's impossible.
