Three-Flourish Project

[PurpleMustache]

I'm working on a project to submit to The Wire that has three flourishes. I wanted to show you guys one of them and see what you think. If you have any tips to improve, I'd love to hear it.



http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CQe3B72O8Jo

 

[yyyyyyy]

The motions need to be a little more connected. It feels like the flourish is divided into like 12 steps or something; you want the whole flourish to feel like one step. For example, when you put the card in your mouth, nothing else is really happening. The whole thing feels sort of unstructured and I think that you should work a little more on the foundations of the moves before considering submitting it to the wire. Hope this helps