Good effort but it's not even worth trying to make Cardistry videos with people like Tobias on the scene. Such massive talent with Cardistry and video editing these days.
Well, although I do agree that very very few people come even close to Tobias, I don't think think this is the right attitude to take. You don't have to expect to be as good as Tobias or Predator Deck to make videos.
In order to get better and maybe one day get to their level, making videos seems like a good medium to receive some feedback and improve.
And besides, if Tobias had thought "Well, there's no point making videos because Dan and Dave are crazy good and I'll never match up," there'd be far fewer great cardists "on the scene" so to speak. That's my opinion anyway.
Towards the OP: It was a nice effort but I'd just work on smoothness at this point and maybe learning more complete moves. The flourishes in the video were fine but a few more flourishes with more fluidity would go a long way towards making your video better.