I am just starting out in restaurant magic also and it is really tough. Your audience won't necessarily be paying 100% attention even if you have great charisma.
Here is my opinion, the thing about cancer patients and stuff, personally it sounds like you are being a slimy salesman, especially if you have not done that yet. Also the way you say about giving back to the community and what not just seems so cheesy and unreal. If I was the manager it would seem like someone is selling me a whole lot of BS if you started saying some of those lines. Stick to what you are and what you have done.
The first part is good but for the second I would suggest saying that for the people you have performed for have had a great deal of fun listening and watching what you have to offer. Also you believe that you can give that something extra to the restaurant to make it unique and have people talking about it.
I have said something very similar and I got the job, I am doing my first gig in two or three weeks and hopefully all works out. So good luck to you and remember, if it sounds fake to you imagine the person who's listening.
Here is my opinion, the thing about cancer patients and stuff, personally it sounds like you are being a slimy salesman, especially if you have not done that yet. Also the way you say about giving back to the community and what not just seems so cheesy and unreal. If I was the manager it would seem like someone is selling me a whole lot of BS if you started saying some of those lines. Stick to what you are and what you have done.
The first part is good but for the second I would suggest saying that for the people you have performed for have had a great deal of fun listening and watching what you have to offer. Also you believe that you can give that something extra to the restaurant to make it unique and have people talking about it.
I have said something very similar and I got the job, I am doing my first gig in two or three weeks and hopefully all works out. So good luck to you and remember, if it sounds fake to you imagine the person who's listening.