I'm not just asking you guys to rate my patter, I'm starting a thread where people can share their patter and know if it's good or not, and hopefully, they can eventually improve their patter writing ability by studying this thread.
I'll start:
This country is obsessed with catastrophe, go look at a newspaper headline and tell me, is it good or bad? odds are you would say bad, people just don't care these days. as soon as some good news appears *coin appears* the next day some bad news comes and people forget about the good news, like it was never even there. *coin vanishes* on one of the rare days that we finally hear some good news,* takes coin out of pocket* something bad happens and takes it's place. *Good coin turns into "bad" bronze coin* the thing is, we are always left with bad news, but the key is to take the bad news, and look past it, no matter where it is, we just have to make the bad news disappear. *shows that coin has vanished*
I'll start:
This country is obsessed with catastrophe, go look at a newspaper headline and tell me, is it good or bad? odds are you would say bad, people just don't care these days. as soon as some good news appears *coin appears* the next day some bad news comes and people forget about the good news, like it was never even there. *coin vanishes* on one of the rare days that we finally hear some good news,* takes coin out of pocket* something bad happens and takes it's place. *Good coin turns into "bad" bronze coin* the thing is, we are always left with bad news, but the key is to take the bad news, and look past it, no matter where it is, we just have to make the bad news disappear. *shows that coin has vanished*