Well, if you do divert from the fool, just make sure you have a good reason and that it's a deliberate choice. But yeah - that's what I meant. In general, you need to be consistent with such a distinctive character.
Your video was done well. The sleights were pretty good, and so was the presentation. Kind of. Well, I'll be honest. I didn't really buy it. It just doesn't sound right. When I listened to what you were saying, I really liked the presentation. When I listened to you saying it, I didn't like it so much. Give me a reason for telling a fairy tale, and it would work. I don't really know how to explain it better than that.
Harry (or should that be Bob)?...
I like your videos. It also has presentational issues, but very different ones. When you play a fool, and/or mess up a trick on purpose, the problem is that most people don't do it well. You do it excellently. I laughed most when it still didn't work after you put the deck down. There was so much expectation, it worked brilliantly. Most importantly, it was believable. The issue I have with your presentation is the other stuff. You start off dictating what you're doing, and it created a bad first impression of your presentation (If I hadn't watched your other videos before, I would've stopped watching then).
Also, I mentioned this last time, you have a habit of playing the fool in half the presentation. Although I like how the trick is structured overall, it doesn't make sense to do an acrobatic sandwich that looks impressive as your first phase.
And finally, there were a few too many inside references for my liking. "We'll make sure the card really is in the center this time" - doesn't work for me because of what it implies about the first phase, although magicians will understand how that references the trick.
Who won? I don't care, to be honest... Congratulations on both putting out good videos.